Yep its a bit better, but I suggest that you replace Games, Hobbies, PC Specs questions to normal font or put a symbol before each question so none get confused, since its out of the template that owner provide so it may cause issues. +1
You can start with the Extra Information for example you can tell us more about yourself and maybe irl activities like,hobbies etc. How often can you be online: You can re-edit and maybe do what i did on my application and specify hours on each day you can be online we all know that you can't spend same time every day there is always something going to pop in and delay you, also no point adding extra hours for example lest say you play 2 hrs a day on the server and you add like two more in your application no point lying. Why do you want to be staff here: You can add some more info on that line like how you can help the community and in what way other than that your application its decent. Good Luck
First of everyone got personal opinion, I'm allowed to rate any applications that's why they are public as for -1's that is because all the apps I rated are short or lack of details which in most cases are staff-hunters. I'm more than happy to edit to +1 if you do fix or put more time in it.